I saw you smiling coyly there,
Lavender sprigs tossed through your hair,
Your gentle cheek a rosy blush
As from your heart a sudden rush
Pushed forth by how I caught your stare.
I prayed that you might care
To take my hand and walk a fare
Distance through sweet autumn’s crush,
Alas, I am told,
You have no love to spare,
No heart for mine you wish to share.
Left stammering, I in boyish blush
So quelled my throbbing heart in hush
Midst autumn’s leaves left standing there.
Alas, I am told.
J. Blue
24-Oct-2013
D’verse Poetics – Rondeau
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Jay,, what sadness and melancholy you get through your rondeau.. I felt the autumn moving in your words…
Thank you
Nice utilization of the form here; how often have we, as young men, fallen in love; been smitten, only to crash with burning emotions. thanks.
far too many my friend, far too many. Thanks
Sadly beautiful Jay.
Impressed (as I am) I took a brief look at your previous posts and as Arnie said: I’ll be back. (!)
Anna :o]
Thank you! Glad you enjoy the postings. Appreciate your support.
I love this, Jay. It’s simple and short, but it conveys a lot of emotion, excitement, dashed expectations. You are the greatest!!!
Pat
Wow – I feel like that phrase is reserved for only Ali! Thanks Pat!
This is an English rondeau – which lacks the use of the refrain in the first line. It’s wonderfully melancholy; the object of his desire is unattainable and uninterested – it’s a familiar story.
Thanks Tony – I feel for the poor guy.
with no love to spare…to have ones heart turned away like that….rather sad….def a melancholy feel…i like the slight variation as well….nicely played to form.
Thanks Brian!
I like the cadence as I read it out loud ~
Lovely romantic post (though not on the ending) ~ Nice to meet you ~
Grace
Thanks you Grace! Very nice to meet you as well.
I like this so much, so hopeful at the beginning, this fetching young lady, charming man, misreading her, crushed, with hopes dashed in the end. What makes this effective, beyond the story line and emotions, which are great, is your use of more classic English words and phrases, reminiscent of older poets of yore.
Thank you! That’s quite a compliment. Thank you very much. Glad you enjoyed the poem.
Lovely – romantic and with a touch of chill for a fall rondeau. Well done!
Thank you!
This reads like a classic romance poem – nice!
Thank you!
Nice form, and the feeling of thwarted love really takes hold here. Excellent work!
Thanks!
Oh, unrequited love – so painful, so necessary it seems… it fits this form so well!
Thank you!
Alas, another heart fallen like a leaf in “autumn’s crush”. Rondeau is a new form to me…this is admirably wrought.
Thank you.
unrequited…nicely done.. life in Rondeau.
Thank you.